Thoughts On This Song?

[The Beatles]

 

[0000]

It was alright.. I couldn't really hear the vocals, and it got a little boring after a while, but the idea of it is deifnitely cool... reminded me of Television on acid.. err.. more acid

 

[The Beatles]

ha thanks. Its my first attempt at songwriting.

 

[TheFeldster]

Interesting piece. Perhaps unsurprisingly, the riff sounded rather Beatlesesque.

Same as eberg, it did get slightly flat at the end, and the vocals were a bit hard to follow (whether that's to do with the recording equipment, or that's the style you were looking for, I'm not sure), but that's a solid first effort.

 

[METALPRIEST]

Good first effort...yes turn the vocals up a bit.

 

[The Beatles]

ah yes, I will. Thanks for the comments.